One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, We are living in a modern era and best technologies can be found
day
by day
. Our life
would be going too easily with the help of these plethora of technologies. One of the major situation is improved in health care field is that due to better treatment and medicines today's human are living healthier
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a healthier life
healthier lives
life
and increasing expectancy
of life
. I think that the merits outweigh the demerits.
To begin
with, there are several drawbacks of longer life
expectancy
. The main con is that due to better medical care older people population growing rapidly and this
ratio can be increasing day
by day
. Older people need more facility and medical treatment and they get more sick as days passed. So, number of nurses and doctors can be busy to improve older people situation
and Suggestion
the older person's situation
older person's situation
an older person's situation
older peoples' situation
also
government take care of senior citizen
to helping them financially and provide pension insurance and etc. So, in the future pension insurance system would be Suggestion
a senior citizen
senior citizens
disappear
because Suggestion
disappearing
government
lost a lot of funds. Suggestion
the government
Moreover
, sometimes due to medicine side effects older people may get in stressed
and their body cannot Suggestion
get stressed
suppport
them give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
support
supports
supported
to
doing a better work.
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However
, I think that the benefits outweigh the cons. New technologies and research make everyone's life
more easier than past decades. Increasing life
expectancy always help
in some or another way. Older people Suggestion
expectancy, always helps
expectancy always helps
has
many advantages to the individual, their family and society. The main pro is in Suggestion
have
have had
family we
have to need Suggestion
the family, we
the family we
older people hand
on our head and they guide their family members as different situations. Suggestion
an older person's hand
older person's hand
older person's hands
Firstly
, the obvious benefit of this
is that people can live longer life
with their family and explore different destinations as family demands. Older people get a more time to spend quality time with their family. Secondly
, Senior person experience get
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gets
benefit
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the benefit
for
family and society. Suggestion
of
For example
, in tough situations we are always get
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are always getting
always get
have always gotten
have always got
advice
from older people and their advice
cannot be wrong at all in any circumstances.
Moving further
, Older people give valuable advice
and emotional support to younger generation
in difficult times. Another main advantage is that grandchildren spend more times with their grandfather and grandmother and they Suggestion
younger generations
the younger generation
a younger generation
also
teach valuable skills and cultural values. We can alive our culture best to give advice
our younger generation. Government can also
benefit from older people.They may make them more productive by increasing the retirement age or by employing them in non-labour work. Many older people are start
their own business after their retirement and give some useful information from Suggestion
are starting
start
have started
business
.
To sum up, thanks to the enhanced medical facilities due to which we now live longer and be part of the progress. Suggestion
the business
businesses
This
enhanced life
expectancy
is a blessing for the human race. Although
longer life
expectancy
is not without cons but
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cons, but
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think that the upsides will justify these.refers to the speaker or writer
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