One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Nowadays, We are living in a modern era and best technologies can be found
day
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day
. Our Use synonyms
life
would be going too easily with the help of these plethora of technologies. One of the major situation is improved in health care field is that due to better treatment and medicines today's human are living Use synonyms
healthier
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a healthier life
healthier lives
life
and increasing Use synonyms
expectancy
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. I think that the merits outweigh the demerits.
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To begin
with, there are several drawbacks of longer Linking Words
life
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expectancy
. The main con is that due to better medical care older people population growing rapidly and Use synonyms
this
ratio can be increasing Linking Words
day
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day
. Older people need more facility and medical treatment and they get more sick as days passed. So, number of nurses and doctors can be busy to improve Use synonyms
older people situation
and Suggestion
the older person's situation
older person's situation
an older person's situation
older peoples' situation
also
government take care of Linking Words
senior citizen
to helping them financially and provide pension insurance and etc. So, in the future pension insurance system would be Suggestion
a senior citizen
senior citizens
disappear
because Suggestion
disappearing
government
lost a lot of funds. Suggestion
the government
Moreover
, sometimes due to medicine side effects older people may Linking Words
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and their body cannot Suggestion
get stressed
suppport
them give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
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supported
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in
However
, I think that the benefits outweigh the cons. New technologies and research make everyone's Linking Words
life
more easier than past decades. Increasing Use synonyms
life
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expectancy always help
in some or another way. Older people Suggestion
expectancy, always helps
expectancy always helps
has
many advantages to the individual, their family and society. The main pro is in Suggestion
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have to need Suggestion
the family, we
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older people hand
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an older person's hand
older person's hand
older person's hands
Firstly
, the obvious benefit of Linking Words
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is that people can live longer Linking Words
life
with their family and explore different destinations as family demands. Older people get a more time to spend quality time with their family. Use synonyms
Secondly
, Senior person experience Linking Words
get
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gets
benefit
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the benefit
for
family and society. Suggestion
of
For example
, in tough situations we Linking Words
are always get
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are always getting
always get
have always gotten
have always got
advice
from older people and their Use synonyms
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cannot be wrong at all in any circumstances.
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further
, Older people give valuable Linking Words
advice
and emotional support to Use synonyms
younger generation
in difficult times. Another main advantage is that grandchildren spend more times with their grandfather and grandmother and they Suggestion
younger generations
the younger generation
a younger generation
also
teach valuable skills and cultural values. We can alive our culture best to give Linking Words
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our younger generation. Government can Use synonyms
also
benefit from older people.They may make them more productive by increasing the retirement age or by employing them in non-labour work. Many older people Linking Words
are start
their own business after their retirement and give some useful information from Suggestion
are starting
start
have started
business
.
To sum up, thanks to the enhanced medical facilities due to which we now live longer and be part of the progress. Suggestion
the business
businesses
This
enhanced Linking Words
life
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expectancy
is a blessing for the human race. Use synonyms
Although
longer Linking Words
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expectancy
is not without Use synonyms
cons but
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