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In recent years , the family structure has changed as well as family roles . What types of changes are occurring do u think these changes are positive or negative

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In
this
 globalisation era, families are becoming nuclear ones owing to that family roles have been changed in daily life. It is a pertinent question to be considered is whether these changes having a negative or positive impact on their family
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 In my opinion, I am in a favour of change, but holds some reservations too
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Firstly
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 in some nuclear families nourishment of their adolescents is not much adequate if both the members are working
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Furthermore
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 grandparents miss their grandchildren who migrate with their family in order to live
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separately
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Nevertheless
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 in enormous nuclear families
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women are now self-dependent
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 the term has changed now, ladies are playing crucial role in financial support and raising the standard of living along with men to contribute their salaries in home expenses.
Secondly
, decades ago
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 in traditional families where 10-12 members were living in to same roof consumed excessive grocery which was too intricate to survive.
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, in a tiny structure guardian and their offsprings are tending to live more happily, independent and more stress free
in contrast
 with joint family
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In addition
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 nuclear family can migrate to developed cities
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 their bright future where it is difficult in big families owing to cost issue
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 To sum up ,
although
 in nuclear family nourishment of adolescent could be improper but it devote self independence , control budgets and equality to the family

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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