Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that it is the responsibility of the parents to educate kids on how to become a better person in the community. Others feel good conduct should be learnt in
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. Children trust their parents and emulate their behaviour. Kids
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, spend more time in
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and pay attention to the instructions of the teacher.  One one hand
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it is the parent's responsibility to train their children. To begin, kids trust what they learn from their parents. For instance, children usually refuse gifts from strangers because their parents told them that it is wrong to accept items from unfamiliar people. As a result, kids, mind who they collect gifts from whether their parents are present or not. Another reason for home training is that children emulate behaviour or spoken words from their parents. A good example is that most abusive words children say is always a reference to words their parents spoke. As a consequence, parents inculcate bad behaviour in their children. On the other hand, teachers
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contribute to training a child.
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of all, students spend 70% of their time in
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, moral conduct should be included within the
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curriculum in order to produce better people in society.
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of all, students
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, students tend to adhere to instructions from teachers more than their parents because they might be punished for not complying.
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, good manners taught in
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cannot be easily erased. In conclusion, I believe it is the sole responsibility of teachers and parents to raise a child because children trust and emulate the character of their parents, they
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spend the majority of their time in schools and pay great attention to what teachers instruct them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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