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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different attitudes toward a bad situation, normally two choices, which are
accepting
Suggestion
accepted
 and improving. While it has some benefits to accept
such
 a bad condition, I believe trying to improve the case is better. There are various reasons why some people choose to take in the status, which they not prefer.
First
, some situations are unable to be changed.
For example
, I remember when my grandmother passed away, I could not recover from the negative emotion, the only way to fix it is to accept the fact.
Second
, people who refuse to accept the their status, may need to face numbers of risks in the future.
Third
, the damages they get physically and mentally will be much bigger than the previous, if they try to shift the case to their ideal condition but failed.
Although
 it is dangerous to improve the status, the merits of trying outweighs the drawbacks.
Initially
, the emotion and feeling of those peoples successes to improve would be extremely nice, compared with people who accept unhappy circumstance.
Next
, by trying to improve, they can find some knowledge they did not know before.
For instance
, people who lost all his money will know the difficulty of making money, and significance of money, if they try to improve. At
last
, those successful people can get a sense of achievement, which might motivate them in the future. In conclusion,
although
 people are beneficial to accept the bad situation sometimes, it is better to try to get out of the bad condition.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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