The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants between 1994 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph shows the estimated maximum
population
of
elephants
in a range of Asian countries in both 1997 and 2004.
Overall
, it can be seen that in most of the countries included in the graph, the
population
fell.
This
was most noticeable in Malaysia and Thailand, where the number of
elephants
was thought to be less than half the figure in 1997. In the former, the number of
elephants
dropped as low as 1000. India remained the country with by far the largest elephant
population
,
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but experienced a dramatic fall in numbers so that in 2004 there may have been as few as 7500. Despite its size, China had a very small
population
of at most 500
elephants
by 2004.
Although
the trend was downwards
overall
, elephant populations were thought to have remained stable in Laos and Vietnam at approximately 1200. The only country where
elephants
showed signs of
recovering
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was Cambodia, where numbers may have risen by up to 200.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, elephants with synonyms.
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