Parents, usually mothers, stay at home to look after their family. People believe they should receive a salary from the government for that. Do you agree or disagree?

In the present situation where the importance of housewife is increasing, it has been a debatable issue whether the government should do financial support for mothers or not. While some people argue that mothers deserve a salary, I contend that it is not feasible for the following two rationales. The
first
point to consider is that to set clear standards for the policy is almost impossible. In every sphere of human history, it is certainly true that mothers have played an important role in their family.
However
, modern society is very complex in that not only females act as housewives, but
also
males work as househusbands. What about grandmothers who care about their grandchildren or young women who care about their younger infant brothers or sisters
instead
of their lost parents? Some people who have never conceived sometimes carry a tremendous amount of burdens as much as that of ‘real’ mothers. Another reason that I find my perception more reasonable is that it is not achievable in terms of economy. Even if a government decided to support a salary for all mothers who had married and experienced pregnancy, the budget of the country could not be limitless. Governments are responsible for the security and well-being of their citizens. To be specific, there are necessary financial values that need to be used for issues
such
as national defence and rejuvenating the economy.
Additionally
, nobody wants to experience the failure of a ‘planned economy’. I think ‘from the cradle to the grave’ is a totally obsolete trend. In conclusion, while it seems quite reasonable that mothers deserve a salary from the government, I am personally convinced that it is not feasible based on the several rationales.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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