In some societies, the number of crime committed by teenager is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crime should receive adult punishment. To what extend do you agree?

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There is no doubt that teenagers are the backbone from each
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of the country in the view of development, growth and crime rate. Nowadays, bad activities are continually going up in under nineteen age group. In the following paragraphs,
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can hide, crime is touching the sky in teen group. Most people are giving priority to punish minor
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the knowing the behind reason of the growing wrong things in
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age group. Boys and girls are highly doing creative activities with less knowledge
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, they do not have any idea, what results will they face in their
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of the biggest rapped in Delhi. In
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case three people were young, but
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of those minor. High court hanged three people, but they saved minor
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the government
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gives
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a chance
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making
good and positive. Todays, our societies are facing illegal actions by juveniles.
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, only teenagers are not only responsible for these
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acts, but
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our education system are not enough good, parents are not spending much time with them results they always confuse what is wrong and right?
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Teenage
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, they should have a chance
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of
understanding his fault
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of
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penalty. In conclusion, I reckon that adults harassment are not
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good ideas
a good idea
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for
teenagers.
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The government
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has
juvenile courts for
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teaching
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lesson. If government
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gives
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adult
punishments, it looks like cut the tree roots before waiting delicious fruits.
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