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In the future it will become more difficult to live on Earth so more money should be spent researching how to like on other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often said that
Life
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 of human being will be no longer On the
earth
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, government need to spend a lot of money on finding the possibility of
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
 in other parts of
Universe
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the Universe
such
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 as Mars and Moon.In my opinion, I completely disagree With given notion and believe that States have to enforce some actions to save
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
 on
earth
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 despite spending large investment in investigate possibilities of
life
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 on other Planets. To commence with, There are compelling reasons for spending on other planets for settling
life
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 there.Scientists
are predict
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predict
are predicting
have predicted
are predicted
 that due to global warming on
earth
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 many habitats will
going
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go
 to disappear in the future which affects
humans
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human
human's
life
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.
In other words
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,
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,
many animals are
become
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becoming
obsolete which
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obsolete, which
 helping us
indirectly for
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indirectly, for
 food
such
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bats helps
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bats, helps
 us for saving crops from
bollworms
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,
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,
Mosquitoes and so on. 
Furthermore
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,
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,
Many researchers found that many unusual
activity
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activities
 are happening on the
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earth
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earth's
 surface which will
catastrophic
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catastrophically
 for human in
future
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the future
.
For example
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,
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,
NASA scientists strike that a big hole are developing in
ozone layer
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the ozone layer
 which create UV radiations that cause negative effect on
human body
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the human body
such
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 as skin cancer
,
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,
eye contracts.
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Also it
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Also, its
Also its
 effects on agriculture productivity.As a consequence, many scientists are investing a large amount
on
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of
 researching possibilities of
life
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 on other
planet
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such
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 as Mars and Moon.
However
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, spending on making
life
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 on
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
planet
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,
Government
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the Government
 needs to take a few steps to saving
life
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 in the globe.Government
have
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has
 to
starts
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start
 awareness campaign to the citizens for not developing any pollution and use less amount of renewable energy
as a
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result it
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result, it
 may
helps
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help
 to make a
life
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 possible
in
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on
 the
earth
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.
Moreover
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, it
also
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benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 for saving
wild
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
life
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 animals from extinction. 
Also
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,
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,
States have to make restrictions on increasing population for saving
earth
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’s land for making it refined.
China
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China, for
for example
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, In 1970 their government implements one child policy that preventing from
raising
advancing or becoming higher or greater in degree or value or status
rising
 population and helps to
decreasing
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decrease
 pollution. In conclusion, human’s
life
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 will be no longer in the future on
earth
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,
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,
many scientists are researching for making possibilities of
life
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 in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
planet
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such
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 as
mars
a small reddish planet that is the 4th from the sun and is periodically visible to the naked eye; minerals rich in iron cover its surface and are responsible for its characteristic color
Mars
. I believe that
instead
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 of spending
large amount
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large amounts
a large amount
 on researching for making
life
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 on
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
planet
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, Governments have to
implements
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implement
 some possibilities to save
life
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 on
earth
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.

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