The diagram below shows the changes, which took place in a coastal area called Pentland from 1950 to 2007
The maps show the changes, which accrued in a coastal town,
Pentland
between 1950 and 2007. It can be seen that the area developed a lot in the given period of 57 years.
Overall
, Pentland
was an industrial area flattened around it and grassland to the west. Over the period, the Pentland
was completely transformed with the addition of a park
, shop and cinema; however
, the eastern part of the Pentland
was car
Correct article usage
a car
park
knocked-down
and after was constructed apartments and shops.
The most noticeable additions were the multi-storey, car Correct your spelling
knocked down
park
, swimming pool, park
Correct word choice
and park
instead
of industrial area in the northwest between 1950 and 2007. Grassland was cleared,
after was built shops and cinema.
A car Remove the comma
apply
park
was replaced apartments
on the east coast of the Change preposition
with apartments
Pentland
. Grassland was put-down
after being Correct your spelling
put down
instead
of reconstructed shops and houses during
Change preposition
for
the
57 years. Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, Yach Marina was built near the sea on the north.Submitted by no6302787 on
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