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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work, some people regard this a completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinion on this?

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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid job. While people have different views of adolescent worker, in my opinion disadvantages of being a child labour outweigh the advantages. The youth paid job has several benefits for the parents and employers and children themselves.
Firstly
, the children who work can acquire skills, they
also
 can cover their expenses and become financially stable.
Furthermore
, by working, children gain self-esteem, and command respect from their elders.
Secondly
, the work of a toddler is beneficial to some extent for their family.
However
, for the poverty stricken parents the work of their juvenile is most beneficial. According to statistics, children commonly contribute around 20-25 percent of family income.
Finally
, the effort of teenager is most profitable for the employers in comparison to the parents. Children are cheap labourers.
Moreover
, because they are children, they have a particular physical characteristic like a nimble finger, sharp eyesight and sharp memory.
On the other hand
, child labour definitely has some drawbacks to all parties. By joining in the labour market from a very tender age, children become homeless and are devoid of love, care and affection, which is the basic right of a youngster.
Besides
, the right to recreation, leisure and other pleasures of childhood are affected by working as juvenile labourers.
Although
 effort of children has some positive effect on the family,
this
 benefit is for short periods only and education has much better effect, especially in
this
 modern world. Employers should be aware that hiring a teenager in any way is against the law in many countries. They may be sentenced to pay penalty or even to go to prison. In conclusion, while child effort is beneficial for many parties, but the drawbacks outweigh the cons and in my opinion, children should spend their full time in their education program.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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