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What are the advantages and disadvantages of technology in our daily lives.

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Due to the advancement of
technology
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 the methods of interaction among people have changed dramatically. These changes have undeniable merits and disadvantages. In
this
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 essay, I shall discuss the effects of
technology
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 in our
relationship
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 with one another. The
way
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 that
technology
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 affected the
relationship
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 of people is that it brings us closer together even though we are geographically far from each other. Before we use snail mail to communicate to our love ones who are far from us, but nowadays we are using cell phones and the internet to reach other people. With just a click of the finger we can communicate to each other anytime, anywhere. We are
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 able to see each other through video call over the phone or internet. It can be seen that
technology
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 has brought us closer together and
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 strengthens our
relationship
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. In
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 perspective,
technology
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 has a positive impact on the
way
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 we interact.
On the other hand
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, using
technology
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 to communicate with each other means that our relationships will be on line not face to face. Talking to each other and making business will not be done personally. We will be missing important details in building
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lationship
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relationship, such
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 as smile, warm shake hands and hugs that keep the
relationship
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 better.
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, when we deal with our business client through phone or internet, we cannot fully express ourselves and unable to build
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relationships
a relationship
asily. These impacts of
technology
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 have harmful effects on our
relationship
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. To sum it up,
technology
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 has improved our
way
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 of interacting with people who are far from us by providing an easier
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 to communicate remotely.
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, our
relationship
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 personally has suffered because we ta
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ess personally after the invention of communication gadgets.
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