Write a letter to the local school in your neighborhood to give suggestions about improving its buildings and play area. Include Why they should be improved Suggestions for how When they could be improved
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Jaspreet Kaur and I lives at
the
6341 173a Street, Surrey BC, which is close near to your Remove the article
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school
. I am writing this
letter to suggest some improvements regarding the school
building and the playground. I hope you will take my suggestions in a positive way and make the desired amendments to improve the infrastructure of the school
.
My daughter is in grade five at your school
. Recently, she got fever
and running nose because of the heating issues in the Correct article usage
a fever
school
building. I talked with the other parents and they are also
claiming that their kids are facing such
issues due to lack
of heating facilities in the building. Correct article usage
the lack
Additionally
, some of the rides in the play zone are
in Correct your spelling
area
the
faulty condition, despite we are paying extra sports fees to the Correct article usage
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school
separately.
I thought this
matter requires your urgent attention. Therefore
, I want you to install a new furnace in the building as soon as possible, so that, kids don
not have to face the same problem again. Correct your spelling
do
Furthermore
, I also
want you to consider upgrading the playzone’s
toys because they are essential for the development of Correct your spelling
play zones
play zone's
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the child
a child
child
.
I hope you will get it done as soon as possible. I along with the other neighbours have decided that we would give you two months to work on it and if the problem is still not fixed, we would report it to the higher level.
I look forward Fix the agreement mistake
children
hearing
from you.
Yours Faithfully,
Jaspreet KaurChange preposition
to hearing
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite