Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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Nowadays there are some families purchase a lot of toys for their children to pay with

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problem

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there are two

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of a coin as they always said

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If you buy your kids a large amount of toys since they still just an infant and you keep doing even when they are older

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that will make them being a

spoilded

having the character or disposition harmed by pampering or oversolicitous attention

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kid

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If you overindulge children

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they will not

apprieciate

recognize with gratitude; be grateful for

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appreciated

to what they think that buying stuffs for them is something you must do

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they just merely force their parents to purchase what they want

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one of the

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why parents buy so many toys for their young is because they don't have time to play with their child

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that children will find themselves being lonely in their own house

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are not just the negative side

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there are

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the positive side

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Buying their young a huge number of toys can

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be a way to show their

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apparent

apparently

to their child

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As children being older and older

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the difficult their parents find to express their love

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buying stuffs can be the easiest way for them to do it

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In conclusion

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purchase a large amount of toys for their young is not

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to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent

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one of the ways to

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terminate, end, or take out

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a young person of either sex

children

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagreee with this opinion?

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