Nowadays advertisements appear in many forms and in many places. They are very powerful and have a lot of influence over people of all ages. Some people think that advertising should be controlled much more strictly by the government, and in some cases banned.

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up everywhere in your daily fife and effect on life regardless of ages. There are people who think that they should be regulated strongly by the government. I believe that advertisings should be controlled from a point of two reasons: controlling people unconsciously and the risk of wrong ways to use them.

Firstly

, people who see

are likely to be controlled by it without thinking because

human brain

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human brains

the human brain

are easy to deceive. According to a famous

phycologist

a scientist trained in psychology

psychologist

, who conducted an experiment by using

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the advertisement

an advertisement

through TV, the number of people who travel abroad increased after they watched an

about a trip to the other countries.

This

experiment indicates that

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the advertisement

have an influence on the decision of a choice unconsciously and make it possible to do whatever intentionally.

Secondly

, advertisements have a risk to be used in the wrong ways. Historically, it is extremely appeared

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When people who was under world war two were forced to fight against the enemies against their own will, the government broadcasted an

to cheer people up in order not to be defeated. To put it in other ways, Advertisements were used to make people go into the

battle fields

a region where a battle is being (or has been) fought

battlefields

Finally

, as I mentioned above, I

agreefor

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agree to

agree for

the idea that advertisements should be restricted because they are likely to control people easily and be used badly. I think strongly that

should be used in order not to effect on choice and

peacefully

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peace

all over the world properly.

Tue Apr 14 2020

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