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1.Do you agree or disagree with following statement? Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.

#children #household #tasks
Kids ought to do family
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job
 when they can
do
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. I agree with the above-mentioned statement
in
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 some extent, and I will develop my viewpoint as follows. The first reason I agree with it is that fathers and mothers should let their
children
 help with ordinary
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, which matches their age and physical characteristics when they can
do
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. It is because performance has an important role in
children
’s basic upbringing, so parents need to know about the features of the child’s age and physical and mental development.
For instance
 , the
children
 aged 1-2 years old are inspired and glad as soon as they eat their food themselves.
Therefore
 , parents ought to support and believe their
children
 do any everyday tasks when they want to do and can do it. The other case I agree with
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is that helping homework not only gives a sense of responsibility
,
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 but
also
 builds an important sense of self-confidence and respect for others.
For example
 , the
children
 who used to do household tasks are successful in any
job
 when they
will
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become an adult.
Furthermore
 , everyone respects a person who does his
job
 well.
That is
 why people who
learned
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 to do any
job
 from
their
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 early age become diligent and can do anything without any
problem
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and
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 suffering. All in all, helping with household tasks makes a valuable contribution to
children
’s upbringing and future;
thus
 , both parents and
children
 need to pay attention to it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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