Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In my
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think every
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subject
is important for us. We have to learn everything through our past, present and future. Some people say that History is one of the most important school subjects it's
true but
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true, but
it has to go along with today's world which is science and Technology. How can we move without our history, the people behind us "The ancient people" is the most powerful people who pushes us to move forward. The taught us how to fire a light, How to find a food, How to
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live
with other and
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the animals
, How to survive and others. Of course we wouldn't know that without them. Science and Technology are important too. They give us a chance to move forward with them. Without Science and Technology we're just a normally
humans
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human
being. We spend our daily life with no useful. Without
them we
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them, we
have no light we have no food, we have no comfortable stuff and things. Old people can
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survive
without these things. Humans
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create
have created
are creating
have been creating
lots of invention to give an unlimited wants of people based on a limited government. May I
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am giving
one example of the development of science and Technology. With
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us a chance to be a member of ASEAN "Association of South East Asia Nation" we can be able to communicate with the other 9 countries with
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the highest
technology.
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It
help
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helps
us to be a TEAMWORK with the 9 other countries to develop our country.
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Help
us in terms of transportation, communication, collaboration etc.
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can definitely hold on to that hope that in the near future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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