Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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Almost any day of the week you can look at
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news and read articles discussing government
money
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. One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is spend more
money
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of government on education or on sports and
recreation
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. Discussing
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controversial question it is impossible to give one well-defined answer for sure,
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personally I tend to think that government should spend more
money
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on
tourism
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and sports.
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, it is well known that
tourism
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is an
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e of the main source of
money
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.
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, now Dubai is the best
tourism
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city in the world,
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they survives from
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. At the moment Dubai is very popular and beautiful cen
ter of
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
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,
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everyone wanted vis
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year, almost
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lux
uorious ci
displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
luxurious
ty. If we
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spend more
money
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on
tourism
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, we will earn a lot of
money
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from cen
ter of
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
recreation
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.
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, it can
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be argued that spending
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on sports is
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ben
efical to
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our country. What I mean here is that we must pay great attention on sports, because
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side of rep
ublic not pa
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the republic, not
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rticularly developed and does not show good results. Take
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, our football clubs already can not participate on “FIFA World Cup” and “UEFA”. Why they can not participate? Because our gov
erment do
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
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does not pay
ch attention on sports and so not spend more
money
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. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in fin
al analysis we
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the final analysis
can say that governments should spend more
money
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on
recreation
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and sports.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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