Tourism is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries, but its disadvantages should not be overlooked.

The negative
impact
of
tourism
is tourist arrivals could erode moral values among
thelocal
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the local
community
.
This
scenario will occur
as a
result
of foreign tourists have
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different thoughts
and attitudes with the local
community
. Typically, foreign tourists have an
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open attitude
.
However
, the local
community
usually being closed and traditional minded.
Throughtourist
arrivals, a marginal
increase
of noble
attitude
in local communities strengthened.
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This is
so because the local
community
has been happy to be influenced by their culture. So
,
Accept space
,
tourism
was able to erode the moral values of the local
community
. Criminal cases will
increase
as a
result
of the arrival of foreign tourists.
This
is so because Entertainment Centre and shopping centre will be opened to many for the sake of
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the success
of the
tourism
sector
. With the availability of entertainment
such
as karaoke,
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disco and
pubs contribute criminal cases. So, criminal cases in our country will
increase
. naddition, foreign tourists would most likely do the crime
such
as vandalism and
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a bully
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in entertainment
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
or other places upon the happening of disagreements with the local population.
This
is
evident
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evidence
that the criminal cases will
increase
as a
result
of the
developmentof
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development of
the
tourism
sector
.
In addition
, the materialistic
attitude
also
will grow
as a
result
of growing
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tourism sector
. Materialistic
attitude
was absorbed in the lives of local residents because the e"
istenceof
the
tourism
sector
in our country. When the e"
istence
an occurrence of something
instance
of a materialistic
attitude
,
then
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the value
of helping in among the local people is missing.
This
is so because the locals are
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more likely
to profit from the foreign tourists to ignore the values. Local residents are
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more conscious
about the advantages of establishing close ties with foreign tourists. Tourist activities in highland areas usually give disturbance to the ecological
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damage such
as land and water as well as habitat and animals. #and use activities for the
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construction of
recreational sites and infrastructures resulting in some forest areas are
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we
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plored
to build
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the resort
between.
This
situation will affect the structure of the land in the area. In the event
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of rain
in large quantities makes the surface runoff. In conclusion, the
tourism
sector
can cause our country to grow by leaps and bounds, but the
sector
also
left a big
impact
on local culture. So, all parties should cooperate to prevent the negative
impact
brought by foreign tourists. With
this
it is hoped that the
tourism
sectorcould
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sector could
be developed and only leave
positive
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a positive impact
impact
to the local
community
.
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