Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include relevant examples from your experience.

To start my essay I should say that there is different point of views about
retirement
. Some people believe that, working should stop after reaching pension
age
somehow the others think completely different. They believe that, the job should be continued after the
retirement
age
. In
this
essay I am going to discuss about
different side
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different sides
a different side
of the views. To continue the
work
after the
retirement
age
, has some positive and negative points. In my opinion, working should be continued due to prevent from psychological problems
such
as depression, being lazy by always staying at home, …. The most important part is that you feel much better by earning money
by
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with
from
your own after
retirement
age
.
Then
you have a sense of responsibilities that you still have time to be
alive
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alive, however
however
, you can run your own business and do whatever you want to do. By the way you are not going to be alone and you can be much happier than before.
For instance
, when you catch up
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
work
or run a business after the
retirement
age you
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age, you
should be contacted
with
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by
more people in your job. My father has been retired after he reached the
age but
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age, but
he continued his job and not only he is making more money than
before but
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before, but
also
he has more sense of
humor
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humour
honour
due to his
work
. Since he got retired, he got sick because of staying at home and nothing to do.
However some
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However, some
others think completely different. They think that people after reaching the
retirement
age
have to stay at home and not working,
also
they think that they have worked enough and now is the time to rest.
Although
the people who have been retired can access the salary from the government, so they are not having any problems. Those people can make more friends as we can see the elderlies which are gathering in the parks and telling the stories of their life and laughing and singing. To sum up I respect both
side
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sides
of the views in spite of having each pros and cons, but I myself prefer to continue my
work
after I reach the
retirement
age
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement
  • milestone
  • celebrate
  • enjoy
  • hobbies
  • personal interests
  • loved ones
  • second careers
  • volunteering
  • mentally active
  • physically active
  • well-being
  • savings
  • financial stability
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