Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include relevant examples from your experience.
To start my essay I should say that there is different point of views about
retirement
. Some people believe that, working should stop after reaching pension Use synonyms
age
somehow the others think completely different. They believe that, the job should be continued after the Use synonyms
retirement
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age
. In Use synonyms
this
essay I am going to discuss about Linking Words
different side
of the views.
To continue the Suggestion
different sides
a different side
work
after the Use synonyms
retirement
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age
, has some positive and negative points.
In my opinion, working should be continued due to prevent from psychological problems Use synonyms
such
as depression, being lazy by always staying at home, ….
The most important part is that you feel much better by earning money Linking Words
by
your own after Suggestion
with
from
retirement
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age
. Use synonyms
Then
you have a sense of responsibilities that you still have time to be Linking Words
alive
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alive, however
however
, you can run your own business and do whatever you want to do. By the way you are not going to be alone and you can be much happier than before. Linking Words
For instance
, when you catch up Linking Words
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
work
or run a business after the Use synonyms
retirement
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age you
should be contacted Accept comma addition
age, you
with
more people in your job. My father has been retired after he reached the Suggestion
by
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age but
he continued his job and not only he is making more money than Accept comma addition
age, but
before but
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before, but
also
he has more sense of Linking Words
humor
due to his a message whose ingenuity or verbal skill or incongruity has the power to evoke laughter
humour
honour
work
. Since he got retired, he got sick because of staying at home and nothing to do.
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However some
others think completely different. They think that people after reaching the Accept comma addition
However, some
retirement
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age
have to stay at home and not working, Use synonyms
also
they think that they have worked enough and now is the time to rest. Linking Words
Although
the people who have been retired can access the salary from the government, so they are not having any problems. Those people can make more friends as we can see the elderlies which are gathering in the parks and telling the stories of their life and laughing and singing.
To sum up I respect both Linking Words
side
of the views in spite of having each pros and cons, but I myself prefer to continue my Suggestion
sides
work
after I reach the Use synonyms
retirement
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age
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