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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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Technology
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has always been influencing
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is always influencing
has always influenced
 our lives throughout human history, especially in recent decades.
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, there are some people complaining
technology
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 makes
life
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 more complicated rather than simpler. Personally, I disagree with
this
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 view. I would argue technological developments in various areas have transformed our world enormously, making our lives much simpler. One of the biggest technological breakthroughs in
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last few years
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the last few years
 is the invention of the internet, which greatly improves people's working efficiency and productivity. It
also
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 enables people to enjoy
easier
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the easy
life
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 by providing online shopping stores so that they do not need to go traditional department stores, which tends to be tiring. People's communication
also
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 becomes much more convenient and efficient with the help of smart mobile phones and WI-FI
technology
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. Thanks to them, we can keep in touch with our family members and friends anywhere and at any time. At home
,
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all kinds of high-tech appliances not only allow us to live a
life
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 of ease
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,
but
also
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 make our
life
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 quite enjoyable.
For example
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, washing machines can help us do all the laundry, while high definition TVs are able to produce amazing special effects
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,
making TV programmes more entertaining. Still, sometimes
technology
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 does make things a little difficult
,
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,
particularly
to
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for
in
 the elderly who are not willing to learn new things. One of the usually complained problems is that there are too many options
when it comes electronic
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when it comes to electronic
 devices. IPhones
,
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,
IPads
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iPads
IP ads
ipads'
ipad's
,
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,
laptops etc.
have
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Have
 so many similar functions that sometimes it is really hard for consumers to make
choice
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a choice
choices
the choice
.
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, most intelligent electronic devices are based on complicated operating systems, and
therefore
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 users have to spend quite some time on learning before feeling comfortable with them. Worse still, once they stop working
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usually because of defects within them, all the convenience given by them would disappear. In conclusion
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although
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 I accept things may occasionally become a little complicated due to
technology
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overall
technology
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 has enabled people to live much simpler
lives
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life
.
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