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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#life #technology
Technology
has always been influencing
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is always influencing
has always influenced
 our lives throughout human history, especially in recent decades.
However
, there are some people complaining
technology
 makes
life
 more complicated rather than simpler. Personally, I disagree with
this
 view. I would argue technological developments in various areas have transformed our world enormously, making our lives much simpler. One of the biggest technological breakthroughs in
last few years
Suggestion
the last few years
 is the invention of the internet, which greatly improves people's working efficiency and productivity. It
also
 enables people to enjoy
easier
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the easy
life
 by providing online shopping stores so that they do not need to go traditional department stores, which tends to be tiring. People's communication
also
 becomes much more convenient and efficient with the help of smart mobile phones and WI-FI
technology
. Thanks to them, we can keep in touch with our family members and friends anywhere and at any time. At home
,
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,
all kinds of high-tech appliances not only allow us to live a
life
 of ease
,
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,
but
also
 make our
life
 quite enjoyable.
For example
, washing machines can help us do all the laundry, while high definition TVs are able to produce amazing special effects
,
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,
making TV programmes more entertaining. Still, sometimes
technology
 does make things a little difficult
,
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,
particularly
to
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for
in
 the elderly who are not willing to learn new things. One of the usually complained problems is that there are too many options
when it comes electronic
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when it comes to electronic
 devices. IPhones
,
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,
IPads
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iPads
IP ads
ipads'
ipad's
,
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,
laptops etc.
have
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Have
 so many similar functions that sometimes it is really hard for consumers to make
choice
Suggestion
a choice
choices
the choice
.
Also
, most intelligent electronic devices are based on complicated operating systems, and
therefore
 users have to spend quite some time on learning before feeling comfortable with them. Worse still, once they stop working
,
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,
usually because of defects within them, all the convenience given by them would disappear. In conclusion
,
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,
although
 I accept things may occasionally become a little complicated due to
technology
,
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,
overall
technology
 has enabled people to live much simpler
lives
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life
.
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