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Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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People’s physical strength deteriorates with aging.
Therefore
, one school of thought avers that, it not wises to fix the retirement age of all the professionals, since different fields require different energy level. I concur with the statement and, in following paragraphs I will discuss the arguments in detail with examples. In certain occupations, employees have to put their lives in danger to complete the tasks. These jobs can execute successfully only when workers are strong both physically and mentally,
however after
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however, after
 forties people not only become weaker, but
also
 would have ample minor diseases which could disrupt them to perform their duties. If these employees still continue their job, it would be risky for them and companies. To illustrate, due to a dearth of energy they would work gradually which affect the productivity and profit or maybe lost their lives while performing hazard mission.
Therefore
, these workers should be retired after forties and, state must bestow them pension so that they do not face any financial obstacles. There are certain types of jobs where people deserve to retire early. One of them is a mini, where people have to work in mines which are more than 200 feet below the ground with extreme temperature and limited oxygen. Another occupation is service in the armed forces, where soldiers must have robust strength, mental power and deadly.
This
 is because many times they have to deal with extremely hazardous conditions
such
 as combat with enemies without having food or water for a week.
Therefore
, these workers should be retired earlier than other professionals
such
 as bankers. On the whole, fixing retirement age for all occupations would cause problems for employees and employers.
Therefore
, it should be flexible for certain occupations with all benefits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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