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Some People believe online reading material should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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It is considered by some that students should only study through e-learning,
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 other favours printed books. In my view, online study material definitely has the number of benefits but it
can not
can not
cannot
 be used in villages where electricity is not available. On the one hand,
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 technology
always help
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always helps
 students to develop their mind. Children can
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 visual graphics and can understand the topic clearly. It not only enables them to correlate the theoretical subject with the actual
world but
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world, but
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 it is cost effective and saves a lot of time which can be used to learn new activities.
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, it has proved that students learn through e-platform has
high IQ
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a high IQ
 as compared to others who learn with physical books.
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,
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 technology is limited to urban areas. There are many villages where internet facilities are poor or negligible.
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, students who
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 laptops or tablets will attract toward pornography munch easily which should be restricted for minors. It is
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 observed that children face visual problems in the early stage due to excess
use
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 of digital instruments. In conclusion, It is clear that that online reading material certainly has an edge in urban
areas but
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areas, but
 the
use
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 of same should be restricted to reduce its negative effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vast range
  • interactive features
  • enhance learning
  • engagement
  • tactile experience
  • screen-related distractions
  • eye strain
  • physical books
  • concentration
  • comprehension
  • hybrid approach
  • diverse learning preferences
  • well-rounded reading habit
  • responsibly
  • digital age
  • foundational skills
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