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Band 6

You recently purchased an item of furniture that was faulty. You telephoned the shop about the problem[s] and were asked to put your complaint in writing. Write a letter to the shop. In your letter • explain what the problem[s) is/are • explain if anything was done to improve the situation • say what you would like the shop to do.

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Dear sir, I am writing
this
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 letter regarding the dissatisfaction of the dining table set purchased from your store
last
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 week, about which I have discussed with you on phone. As I have
explained
Add the preposition
toexplained

The phrase following the intransitive verb explained seems to be missing a preposition. Consider adding one.

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 you that the leg of one chair of the set is stumbling and the top glass of the table is not fixed properly .
However
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, When I selected the item it was all perfect. I think
,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma between the verb and object in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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 it got these problems while transportation
,
Remove the comma
apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma in a compound subject. Consider removing it.

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and the team sent by your renowned store to assemble the same was not up to the mark. I have been calling you consistently
from
Change preposition
for

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

last
Correct article usage
the last

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 three days to send the carpenter to fix the problem,but all in vain .The advertisements of your store are fake and your team is misguiding the customers, by not sending the items correctly and in superior condition. I would now request your support team to kindly change my product by
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 Friday. As I have already planned the house warming party on coming Sunday. Looking forward
for
Change the preposition
to

The preposition for after the verb Looking may be incorrect. Consider changing it to another preposition.

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 hearing from you soon, Yours Faithfully, Rahul Mahajan

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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