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In modern society, fashion is becoming more and more popular in people’s choice of clothes. Why? Do you think it is positive development or negative development?

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Nowadays, the development of
fashion
 -especially for fast
fashion
- growing rapidly. In order to be a stylish person, I believe that
fashion
 industry brings negative development to the society. The growing of
fashion
 causes by the desire of people to look good and stylish. The people want to get more respect and admiration from other people by using what they wear. It is
also
 a way to express the taste in
fashion
 of the society.
This
 desire is supported by fast
fashion
 which produces
clothing rapidly
Accept comma addition
clothing, rapidly
 by mass-market retailers. Fast
fashion
 clothing collections are based on the most recent
fashion
 trends presented at
fashion
 events. The people could easily get the
fashion
 products from the latest style with more affordable by buying the fast
fashion
 clothing. Fast
fashion
 brings two major problems; labour and environmental issue. Back in 2018, two garment workers from Indonesia travelled to Japan to call on Uniqlo to pay the worker’s compensation. In Indonesia, there was a garment industry that used by Uniqlo to produce sweeter. The workers -more than 2000 workers- being pushed until late night and did not get paid by the garment. The
fashion
 industry,
also
, produces toxic wastewaters from textiles which is dumped directly into the rivers. The wastewaters are extremely harmful for the aquatic life and the health of people living by those river banks. In conclusion,
fashion
 commerce becomes popular because of the human ambition to express the taste of
fashion
.
However
, it faces two big problem
that is
 the poor working condition and environment damage.

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