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the pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of fairmont island, according to a servey of visitors.

the pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of fairmont island, according to a servey of visitors.
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According to
 a survey of travellers, the pie charts display the most important advantages and drawbacks of Firmont Island.
Overall
, the bulk of tourists felt really comfortable with the residents. In comparison, the main drawbacks to visiting Fairmont isle are the high cost of
life
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. A higher percentage of the island's benefits went to its inhabitants, at 40 per cent. The landscape aspect
also
 kept pace with
the
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37 per cent. The culture and accommodation prices were more stable, which shows that tourists enjoy these aspects of the area equally. As reported, the most off-putting aspect for tourists was the cost of housing , cited by 45
percent
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 of survey respondents. Followed by a
third
 of the participants said that the Island has an entertainment problem. The
last
 two shortcomings were climate and dishes listed respectively by 20
percent
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 and 5
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 of respondents.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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