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some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Friendship is a
realtionship
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relationship
 which everyone needs. A
friend
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 is the one who does not come from the family but
meet
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meets
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 you in the journey of life. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 we will discuss about
this
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realtionship
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relationship
, what
kind
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 of company we should keep the people who have the same
thoughs
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thoughts
 as you, or one that has little different aspects to look for you, for your own good. There is a saying that "a
friend
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 in need is a
friend
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 in deed",
according to
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this
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 a good
friend
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 is who always be on your side, no matter what you are going through regardless of who you have to give in return. In my
experiance
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experience
, a
friend
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 who always
think
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thinks
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 the same
like
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as
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 you will always be able to make a good bond with you. you will always feel happy when you think of
somethink
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something
 to do in your life and a
friend
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 is always there to help you and boost you to make it right and achieve your goal.
These
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This kind
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kind
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 of friendship will always
motivates
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motivate
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 you to do what you
though
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thought
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 of. Most of the time, when you do something results in positive for you, but on some of your decisions maybe it may hurt someone from your family or others. Though, you talk to your
friend
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 who
also
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think
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thinks
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 the same that
its
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it's
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 good for you
but
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apply
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you both do not realise that it may hurt someone.
these
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this kind
these kinds
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kind
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 of deeds
will
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apply
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may
also
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endup
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end up
in
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with
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an
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the
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 opposite result. On the
otherside
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other side
, where your
friend
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 may not be thinking like you and you maybe are not happy with it as well. But in the end or when you realise that the things you
where
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were
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 thinking
was
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were
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 not right you
maybe
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may
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 get your
expeced
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expected
 result. In
these
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this kind
these kinds
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kind
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 of
bonds
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bonds,
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 you have a chance of brian storming in which you may get better ideas for the purpose of what you intended,
also
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 in
this
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 relationship you
also
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 feel
the
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apply
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respect for
eachother
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each other
 which is very crucial for a
long lasting
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long-lasting
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 bond with someone.
this
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also
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 will help you to find a better path and direction and
also
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 becomes a
really
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real
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 learning experience for both of you as you both have your different
experiances
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experiences
of
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in
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 life. As they, two minds are better than one. In my opinion,
i
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I
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 would say a
friend
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 who sometimes makes you
caution
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cautious
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 about the path or decision you like to go for will always be better for you and the other
realtions
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relations
 you have. it may
also
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 stop you
for
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from
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 doing something but that will prevent you from making a mistake and you will be more happy and
greatful
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grateful
of
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for
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you
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your
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 friendship
beacuse
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because
 it will give
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you an
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an other
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another
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 reason to
make
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find
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 a new and better way to go on.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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