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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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While some people are of the opinion that the optimum time for children
to begin
 their formal
education
 is as soon as possible, others disagree and believe that it should not commence until they are aged 7. Personally, I believe that later is better. Those who argue for beginning earlier base
this
 on several reasons.
Firstly
, they believe that the earlier a child starts to learn, the better their intelligence will be.
This
 is because they will have a head-start over those starting later who will fall behind. Another reason is that children will learn to be competitive, independent, and motivated as they aim to get the best scores and to complete their homework on their own. These are strong arguments in a world which these days rewards the highest achievers with the best jobs. Despite these arguments, I believe starting at age 7 is the right choice.
This
 is due to the fact that over-burdening them with academic study and trying to beat others simply leads to stress.
This
 is not a good situation for the very young, who should be encouraged to enjoy their lives not compete with their peers.
Also
 focusing on play-based programmes at home or have elsewhere developed cognitive abilities more effectively.
For example
, in countries
such
 as Sweden and Finland children start formal
education
 later and they have shown better schooling results than many other countries.
Thus
, there is clear evidence of its benefits. In conclusion, I think that children should start school later because they can learn more through play-based activities than formal
education
. Formal
education
 at an early age simply leads to stress and does not help children achieve higher grades long-term.
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