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nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance from the screen (laptop, etc) and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree?

#entertainment #performance #screen #laptop
Watching a live entertainment or on-
screen
 shows has become a popular form of leisure interest in the society today. Others believe that seeing those performances live is unnecessary since there are laptop or TV
screen
 where people can watch it online. I partly agree with the statement, for both have its own separate ways on how to catch the attention and satisfaction of the viewer. People at present enjoy watching entertainment programs from the comfort of their home. With the advancement of technology, everyone can easily have an instant access to their much-awaited shows without the need travel all the way to the place of the event. The anticipated heavy traffic,
hassle from
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hassle, of
hassle of
 standing in a long queue to get a pass and improper
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of the crowd have been avoided.
As a result
, watching on
screen
 enables the viewer to fully understand and enjoy the content of the show due to less distraction.
Also
, another factor that discourages other to watch performance on
site
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the site
 is the steep ticket price and limited number of seats provided.
Thus
, watching entertainment shows on
screen
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the screen
 is more convenient and economical.
However
, watching
actual live performance
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an actual live performance
the actual live performance
 gives a worthwhile lifetime experience. The socialization part of the show provides
opportunity
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an opportunity
the opportunity
 to meet new friends who
shares
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share
 common interest.
Furthermore
, attending live shows is a great escape
form
a giver or sender
from
 daily work routine.
For instance
, a workaholic person who was invited by his friends to attend a concert, finds some sort of enjoyment and feeling of work- life- balance. Overall, being personally involved in the actual event, creates a remarkable memory and
sense
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a sense
 of satisfaction. In conclusion, watching on
screen
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a screen
 or live performance had shown a significant difference of viewer’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, emotion and preference. Convenience and social aspects must be both considered.
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