Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There are many ways for people to transport from place to place and these vehicles are becoming more
diversifield
having variety of character or form or components; or having increased variety
diversified
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Eventually
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the most common ways for people to travel are railways and roads
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Therefore some
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Therefore, some
said that
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
should
invested
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invest
more
on
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in
railways rather than roads
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In my opinion
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
am not fully agree
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do not fully agree
have not fully agreed
with
this
statement
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From ancient until now roads have
play
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played
vital role
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a vital role
and essential to human domestic and travel
life but
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life, but
since science and technology get more and more develop, roads no longer dominates as before
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Therefore
railways are becoming viral in many
nation
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nations
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mostly the developed countries
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Railways are faster than roads and more
affortable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
for every
classes
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class
in society from low to high class
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Yet there are many drawbacks in
this
case
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this
point of view
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for developing and undeveloped countries
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the funds that the
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
have to pay
to
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for
this
sort of instructions is
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
much to
affort
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not only it is too costly for these
nations but
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nations, but
it is
also
unnecessary with the citizens
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Even though
railways are faster it is not flexible for people to self-motivated so
that is
why railways are unnecessary
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Not only with these
nations but
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nations, but
also
with developed
countries there
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countries, there
are no needed to put so much effort on railways because the citizens in these countries
are prefer
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prefer
are preferring
are preferred
to use
there
of them or themselves
their
own vehicles
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In conclusion
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look in the reality there is unnecessary for the
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
to investmore
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invest more
to invest more
money on
railways
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the railways
than roads because of its impracticality in citizens domestic life
.
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