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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Nowadays, supermarkets are stocked with
food
 products from around the world. Some would argue that it would be better if
food produce
Suggestion
the food produce
 was not imported. I firmly believe that
this
 view is correct, and will discuss the reasons why in
this
 essay. It is certainly the case that importing
food
 can have a negative effect on local culture.
This
 can be seen in countries
such
 as
Japan where
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Japan, where
 imported
food
 has become more popular than traditional, local produce, eroding people's understanding of their own
food
 traditions.
Although
 some would claim that
this
 is a natural part of economic development in an increasingly global world, I feel strongly that any loss of regional culture would be detrimental. A
second
 major reason to reduce imports is the environmental cost. Currently, many
food
 imports,
such
 as fruit, are transported thousands of miles by road, sea and air, making the product more expensive to buy and increasing pollution from exhaust fumes. Despite the fact that the trade in
food
 exports has existed for many years, I am convinced that a reduction would bring significant financial and environmental gains.
However
, many jobs depend on
food
 exports and some less developed countries may even depend on
this
 trade for economic survival. In spite of
this
, the importance of developing local trade should not be undervalued. In conclusion, I am certain that reducing
food
 imports would have cultural and environmental benefits. What is more, the local economy should, in time, prosper commercially as the demand for local and regional products remains high resisting the competition from overseas.
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