Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent to you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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of
prevalence of celebrities on mainstream media. Suggestion
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Thus
, some parents claimed that a great amount of coverage of famous people Linking Words
have had
a detrimental impact on children. I Suggestion
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similarly
believed that, and my reasons are threefold.
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stars
. Research has indicated that most adolescents spend
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the stars
over
1-2 hours on gossiping, which has posted a threat to study for children. Suggestion
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Thus
, putting considerable emphases on idolizing stars has contributed a decrease of learning outcome for children.
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Misbehavior
is another obvious consequence. If a famous person commits crimes Suggestion
Misbehaviour
such
as drug addiction, the event will be made a headline on the news;
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, tending to be confused between notoriety and fame, children may imitate these celebrities' Suggestion
However
behavior
. One particularly salient example of manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
this
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such
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behaviors
in movies. manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
Thus
, it is evident that children's Linking Words
behavioral
problems can be affected by celebrities.
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
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misbehavior
and the tendency to be addicted to improper or wicked or immoral behavior
misbehaviour
stars
, misconception is the other detrimental impact. Inevitably,
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the stars
children
may form a distorted Suggestion
Children
worldview
. The prevalence of these famous figures may convey an impression which is Suggestion
unrealistic expectation
. Admittedly, these celebrities could argue that the impression they convey Suggestion
an unrealistic expectation
unrealistic expectations
also
can enlighten children. Linking Words
For instance
, a famous athlete can inspire children so that children grow into a great athlete. Linking Words
Nevertheless
, little are children who are inspired by these celebrities in order to grow into a famous figure. Linking Words
In contrast
, children tend to do what is unrealistic at their age, Linking Words
such
as being rich.
In summary, because of the Linking Words
misbehavior
, the tendency to be addicted to improper or wicked or immoral behavior
misbehaviour
stars
, and the misconception to which the ample coverage of famous figures may
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the stars
contribute
, it can be inferred that considerable coverage of famous figures may pose a threat to children on various aspects.Suggestion
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