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some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region.Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life.

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Tradional
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Traditional
 cultures
such
 a ritual, festive event, tales are still popular nowadays, but not as they were in the past. Some traditional cultures are no longer suitable for modern time, they are still important to preserve a traditional way of life. On the one hand, people
are appealed
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are appealing
 to
internet
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the internet
 and modern things rather than to traditional culture are out of
data
the specified day of the month
date
 and inappropriate.
For example
,
Accept space
,
CHinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
 people often go to Temple to wish for good luck on
special day
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the special day
special days
a special day
.
young
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
Young
 people think these kinds of activities are too
superstition
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superstitious
 and have no scientific base.Some traditional cultures are considered not worth maintaining.
On the other hand
, we need
consider
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to consider
 the importance of culture.It is a special thing, what
make
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makes
the the
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the
 country
different
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differs
 from the others.No regions or nations have the same traditional cultures.Tradition is passed down through generation it affects how we live, it makes us different, it makes our soul.
Moreover
, it would create a society consisting of empathetic people and strongly bonded relationships. All in all, In my opinion, while some cultures not longer proper, it is determinative to preserve our traditional way of life.
we
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We
 adopt other cultures and
diverse our own
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diverse as our own
 tradition.

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