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Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environment responsibility While others believe that tourists should not accept any responsiblity at all.To what Extend do you agree or disagree.

#people #tourists #environment #responsibility #responsiblity
With the advent of technology, the virtual
world
has become
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becomes
 a daily life for people. There you can be the person you want, there you can make a great friendship, but it can be all a big illusion. But sometimes it's possible to find there a real
friends
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friend
. In
this
world
, you can be heard, you can be understood and you can do whatever you want. And
this
 is how you think you have a lot of friends, but in the end, in the real
world
, they turn out to be strangers to you. Of
course there
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course, there
 are always exceptions and if you come across the right person and you're ready to take the risk, online friends can become real-life friends.
For example
, I can give my
parents they
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parents, they
 met on a dating site, and their virtual love has become a reality.
However
, the virtual
world
 is a big unknown addictive place and
that is
 why it is so desired by humans, but in the real
world it
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world, it
 can all be just an illusion and you can be hurt. I firmly believe that we need to pay more attention to the real things in life.
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