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The chart shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

The chart shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
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A glance at the illustration provided reveals the fluctuation of dwelling values within 12 years from 1990 to 2002 in comparison with the average value of 1989 in five huge cities. It is apparent from the figure supplied that through the surveyed
period
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, the price of houses in all four cities (NY, Madrid, Tokyo, London) had a tendency to rise,
while
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 there was
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 correlated in Frankfurt. The proportion variability in Madrid dwelling prices was matched by a roughly similar trend as Frankfurt during the
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 between 1990 and 1995. Both of them were higher than the price of houses in 1989,
approximately
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 3%.
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, house values declined significantly in
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 remaining cities (5% in New York,
about
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 7.5% in both Tokyo and London). The latter half of
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period
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 the exponential growth of dwelling worths in London, which had the highest
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rising percentage, up to 11%.
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 was followed by a range of increases in house prices
of
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 New York, Madrid,
Frankfurt
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and Frankfurt
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 accounting for 5%, 4% and 2%, respectively. Though there was a slight surge over the
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 from 1996 to 2002, the value of Tokyo dwellings was constantly lower than in the year 1989 at 5%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • suburb
  • metropolitan
  • trend
  • appreciation
  • depreciation
  • residential market
  • housing bubble
  • real estate
  • economic factors
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • property value
  • inflation-adjusted
  • comparative analysis
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