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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays the impact of technology has transformed the way people
work
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 and communicate with each other.
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, it is actually possible to
work
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 from home or from other places, like at the dentist’s or on a train, without the need for physical presence.
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 trend is believed to have great benefits and the ability to
work
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 from anywhere even outweighs its drawbacks.
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, information technology has allowed professionals to have flexible
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 hours.
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, Skype conferences actually save valuable time and energy that
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employees which
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employees, which
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 commuters would have spent on trains and auto-owners on crowded roads.
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arrengement
the thing arranged or agreed to
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 offers better
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 performances since
those
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 professionals do not have to abide by the strict rules of an office environment and are
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 more energy-driven and stress-
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freer
 than those who
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 in an office.
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,
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 mobility has created many job opportunities, and it actually benefits the younger generation of workers, which has developed a lot of soft skills in the digital
area
a period marked by distinctive character or reckoned from a fixed point or event
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 (e.g.
young
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
Young
 workers can easily
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 with Microsoft tools on laptops or
ipads
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iPads
iPod
pads
 like PowerPoint or can quickly download apps like Zoom or Microsoft Teams), and has connected many professionals, especially the ones working in great firms, with clients from all over the world.
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, people outside the office have many more distractions due to
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 flexibility and can
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 fail to complete their working tasks –
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,
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, can be easily overcome with apps that help people to focus and to block distractions. In conclusion, I do believe that, in
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 a globalized and modern world, where anything can happen, working from anywhere is one of the best working experience people can aspire to.

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