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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals, of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
#show #percentages #meals #three #nutrients
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The charts below show the ratio of food used by Americans daily. It is plainly visible that most unhealthy nutrients are taken usually at dinner or snacks.
The
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 closer look at the details reveals that over
two fifths
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two-fifths
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 of the ratio of sodium are used during
evening
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the evening
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 time. The added sugar consumed in snacks
nearly
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as
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the same percentage as the sodium is
at
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slightly more than 40
percent
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per cent
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.
However
, the saturated fat accepted by the majority as
the
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 significant threat to
the
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apply
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health is slightly above
a
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two fifths
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two-fifths
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 at evening meals. Turning to the least rate of the mentioned elements, there is clear evidence that they are
using
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 at breakfast time is approximately at the same level fluctuating around a quarter. Consumers use
in
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snacks
least
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the least
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 sodium and
more
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most
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 sugar. Concluding the information given in the charts, the data highlight that meals with risky elements,
mostly
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are
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taken during
the
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dinner time
is
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are
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 a big threat to
the
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apply
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health.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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