Shopping is the favourite pastime for most of the young people. Why do ou think is that? Do you think that they should encouraged to do some other useful activities?

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Most people enjoy except for men when

they

of them or themselves

their

shopping. Spending much time in

shop

that means people

savor

derive or receive pleasure from; get enjoyment from; take pleasure in

savour

their time.For men, most of them do not like

waste

Suggestion

wasting

time in

shop

Suggestion

the shop

a shop

because they think doing sport or other things

instead

of shopping. There are some reasons why people relish when shopping.

First

of all, when youthful people going to

shop

they feel pleasure. By reasons of is they to do their

favorite

something regarded with special favor or liking

favourite

things that makes them happy.

For instance

, a girl

want

Suggestion

wants

to have a gorgeous dress just like

princess

Suggestion

a princess

princesses

, and she goes to

shop

Suggestion

the shop

shops

that have and buy the dress,

this

makes her joyful.

Second

of all,

instead

of doing nothing is dismal for your health. When you

shopping

Suggestion

are shopping

shop

at least walk a lot. Walking a lot is become

you

of you or yourself

your

well-being. Lately for young people addicted shopping as

this

makes them more cheerful than other things. To reiterate, most people should shopping often

instead

of being home all day. Just you don't have to buy anything, just perceive the price, feel the material and

this

increase your more knowledge.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

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180 words

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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