Shopping is the favourite pastime for most of the young people. Why do ou think is that? Do you think that they should encouraged to do some other useful activities?

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Most people enjoy except for men when
they
of them or themselves
their
shopping. Spending much time in
shop
Use synonyms
that means people
savor
derive or receive pleasure from; get enjoyment from; take pleasure in
savour
their time.For men, most of them do not like
waste
Suggestion
wasting
time in
Use synonyms
shop
Suggestion
the shop
a shop
because they think doing sport or other things
instead
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of shopping. There are some reasons why people relish when shopping.
First
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of all, when youthful people going to
shop
Use synonyms
they feel pleasure. By reasons of is they to do their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
things that makes them happy.
For instance
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, a girl
want
Suggestion
wants
to have a gorgeous dress just like
princess
Suggestion
a princess
princesses
, and she goes to
Use synonyms
shop
Suggestion
the shop
shops
that have and buy the dress,
this
Linking Words
makes her joyful.
Second
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of all,
instead
Linking Words
of doing nothing is dismal for your health. When you
shopping
Suggestion
are shopping
shop
at least walk a lot. Walking a lot is become
you
of you or yourself
your
well-being. Lately for young people addicted shopping as
this
Linking Words
makes them more cheerful than other things. To reiterate, most people should shopping often
instead
Linking Words
of being home all day. Just you don't have to buy anything, just perceive the price, feel the material and
this
Linking Words
increase your more knowledge.
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