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In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs what are the courses of this difference ? What will be the parental roles in future?

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Parents
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 play a central
role
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 in
children
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's
life
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lives
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.
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, in many
communities
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communities,
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 the responsibilities of
mother
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 and
father
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 are divided
according to
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 their
role
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. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 I will not only
discussed
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discuss
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 the duties of
parents
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,
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apply
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 but
also
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represents
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represent
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 the patenting roles in the upcoming
future
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. Apparently, the
role
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 of
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mother
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a mother
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 is to nurture their
child
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.
This
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 is because
mother
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 take care of their
child
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, and they spend a large amount of
time
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 together, which creates emotional bonding.
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this
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, mothers understand their
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children
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children's
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 moods
,
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apply
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 and like and dislike
as
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apply
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per, which creates
feeling
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feelings
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 of love and affection.
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,
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mother
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mothers
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 always
cook
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cooks
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 their
children
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's
favorite
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favourite
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meal
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meals
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, so
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that Young's
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Young's
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Young
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could
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can
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 enjoy
it
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them
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 with ease.
Although
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the
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father
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's
role
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 is to provide financial support to their juveniles, for their holistic development. To explain
further
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, fatherhood is based on
practical
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a practical
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 approach, and
they
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their
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 behaviours toward their wards is stringent, which is necessary for becoming
better
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a better
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 human in
the
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apply
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society.
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this
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,
father
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 provides better education to their youth,
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also
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and also
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 take them for recreational activities, which helps to build better a relationship.
Thus
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,
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mother's
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the mother's
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 duty is
give
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to give
giving
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 love to their
youngs
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young
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, and at the same
time
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father
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 helps their
child
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in
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by
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 providing education. Paradoxically, in the
future
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 situation might change tremendously, and the chief reason for
this
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that
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is that
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 both
parents
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 will be working
for
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to
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fulfilling
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fulfil
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 their
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child
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children's
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 desires. In the upcoming
time
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,
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mother's
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mothers'
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 duties will be changed, they will not only take the responsibility of dropping their
children
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 at school
,
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apply
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 but
also
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paying
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pay
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 their
juvenile's
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juveniles'
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 fees.
Besides
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this
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,
children
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 will be self-reliant at
the
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an
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 earlier age,
due to
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 their working
parents
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.
According to
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the
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a
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 recent survey has been conducted by the
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Children
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Children's
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 Wealth Organization reveals that
,
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 more than 65% of females hardly able to spend
time
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 with their
youngs
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young
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, because
to
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too
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 they are more
include
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included
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 in work.
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, fathers will take all
households
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household
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 responsibilities.
This
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 is because both couples have hectic work schedules in the
future
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,
therefore
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 they cook the food for
family
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the family
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 and even feed their
child
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 which helps them to maintain their Lifestyle.
Hence
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,
this
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 will be
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a scenerio
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scenerio
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scenario
scenarios
 in the
future
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. In conclusion,
parenting
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the parenting
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role
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role
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apply
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is vital for
upbringing
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the upbringing
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 of
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child
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the child
a child
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.
Nonetheless
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, the circumstances will definitely
changed
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change
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 as per their
families
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family's
families'
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 requirements, but love and nurturing
to
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for
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 their
child
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 will never change for
the
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a
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 sustainable
future
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.
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