The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The pie charts compare the average intake of three nutrients in four main meals, the overconsumption of which can be detrimental to health.
It is clear that
sodium and saturated fat is rich in foods eaten at dinner
while
added carbohydrate is mostly taken in from snack.
In addition
, breakfast is less nutrient-dense, which is revealed by the smallest pie on all charts. Regarding sodium and saturated fat, both nutrients are mostly provided
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evening meals, at 43% and 37%, respectively,
while
the percentages of them in lunch consistently rank
second
, with 29% and 26%.
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an equal proportion of sodium is contained in snacks and breakfast, accounting for 14% each,
whereas
the former meal is richer in saturated fat than the latter one, with 21% and 16% respectively. In terms of added sugar, more than 40% of
this
nutrient are from snacks, which nearly doubles the figure for dinner, at 23%. The added sugar value in lunch is significantly lower, with 19%,
while
like other nutrients, breakfast is not dense in added sugar, contributing only 16%.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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