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government should spend more money on education than on recreation and sports. do you agree or disagree

#government #money #education #recreation #sports
One of the
widley
to a great degree
widely
wildly
 debated problems nowadays is administrations should spend more money on
education
 than on recreation and sports. But people do not realize yet that formation important than sports and recreation. Personally
,
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,
I tend to think
this
 the
education
 really necessary.
Firstly
,
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,
it is well known that todays so that invent a new thing or open news one must be an educated person.
Also your
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Also, your
 invented thing brings more benefits
,
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,
because no one possibly could not find
this
 thing.What I mean here is that your created thing may be very useful for society.
On the other hand
,
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,
it can
also
 be argued that now educated human’s period not sportsmen’s time.And I can say that
education
 can be a companion for all of your life.Nowadays
,
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,
because of
lack
Suggestion
the lack
 of educated people some countries are not developing. Take
for example
: Ethiopia
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,
south Sudan
,
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,
Erytrea
,
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,
Somalia and etc. In derivations
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,
taking everything mentioned into account in our
last
 analysis we can say that nowadays that can develop the state and can give more profits to your state and usefully for you is
education
.
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