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"Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"

#universities #numbers #students
In recent decades, the allowance for the equality in the number of each sex in every subject has been receiving a great deal of public attention.
Although
,
this
 suggestion appears attractive, the disadvantages will be far more significant.
Firstly
, accepting equal proportions of each gender in every university subject seems to be unfair. Obviously, the number of candidates giving access to
this
 school should depend on their applications. The university had
better base
Suggestion
a better base
 on their competence and morality to find out who are suitable.
Secondly
, the number of students required need to suit the characteristics of the work. Undeniably, some certain fields have to receive more men than women and the reverse of
that is
 right. Regarding to police, it is a risky profession that the police academy usually gives the priority to the boys which are considered to be more vigorous than girls and have no concern for pregnancy.
Besides
, the
universities training
Accept comma addition
universities, training
 nurses
is
Suggestion
are
 right for the case, they recruit the females outnumbering the males since as usual, the weaker sex is adept at looking after the patients. To conclude, the
selection
Suggestion
selected
 candidates for universities relying on the type of sex is unrealistic. The university should be encouraged to recruit students on the basis of their intellectual level and integrity or the relevant features of specific jobs.
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