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Some people think that news and media are affecting our lives in a positive way while others disagree. Do you agree or disagree?

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There are those who believe that current affairs reports and various other means of transmitting information are beneficial to humanity, and
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, there are those who dispute
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. I totally disagree with the opinion because the news and media deceive people and make them feel depressed. The main reason why I believe that the news and media are harming our
life
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 is that they have been used as an effective tool by people with power and money throughout history.
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, from WWII, when the Nazis controlled German citizens with their detrimental propaganda, to the most recent case, when Chinese authorities hid the actual number of COVID-19 cases, media,
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 as newspapers and radio broadcasts, have been manipulated by governments.
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, many people have been damaged mentally and physically; many German soldiers died young for the Nazis; people in the world currently have lost their jobs and normal
life
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 because of the unprecedented virus, and corrupted media helped to hide the reality. Another reason why I support the notion that our livelihoods are being harmed by various forms of media is that they can make people exceptionally frustrated when celebrities’ lives are exposed to the public.
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, if a daughter of a big hotel owner,
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 as Paris Hilton who has never been poor, shows off her everyday
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 of extravagance wasting hundreds of fashion items, and TV
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 highlights her luxurious
life
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.
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, consuming an enormous amount of time on Instagram to glance celebrities’ lives, people might lose a willingness to have a good and faithful everyday
life
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. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the opinion that news and media are making our
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 positively because they are manipulative and make people discouraged. Given
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 situation, it seems that people should have a keen insight in order to differentiate true from false when they get new information from any source.
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