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The line graph illustrates the number of magazine sales by a publisher in 4 European countries between 1999 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of magazine sales by a publisher in 4 European countries between 1999 and 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line diagram shows, magazine sales by a solitary
distribute
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 from 1999 to 2002 in the four
nations
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,
France
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, Holland,
Belgium
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 and Germany. Generally,
deals
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 in
Belgium
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 and
France
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 expanded
while
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 they fell generously in Germany. Magazine Sales in
Belgium
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 encountered a sensational ascent over the 4-year time frame. They began the period at just shy of 200,000 and
afterward
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 rose consistently throughout the following two years around
until
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300,000. In the
last
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 year of the
word
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world
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,
deals
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 in
Belgium
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 soared from 300,000 to 500,000.
Deals
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 in
France
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likewise
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 encountered an ascent over the stretch, be that as it may, it was substantially less articulated than in
Belgium
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. The figure for
deals
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 in
France
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 began the language at about 420,000 and completed the style at a similar rate as in
Belgium
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. The other two
nations
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appeared
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 in the information experienced more negative
deals
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.
While
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 1999 to 2000 saw a slight increment in
deals
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 in Holland from 300,000 to roughly 350,000, the following year saw a reduction to a similar level as 1999 and
this
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 didn't change in the
last
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phrase
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phase
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 of the year.
Deals
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 in Germany began the period as the most elevated out of the entirety of the four
nations
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 in 450,000 yet
this
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 number fell consistently to around 250,000, the least of each of the four
nations
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, before the end of the span.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nations, france, belgium, deals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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