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There is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit. You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre. In your letter: Describe what the problem with the changing rooms is Say what happened the last times you complained Explain what you want the manager to do

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I am writing
this
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 letter to you to express my dissatisfaction about the
problems
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 connecting with the sports
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center
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centre
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 at
last
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 time. Obviously, I want to inform you
the
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of the
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 head
problems
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 of your
sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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.
Firstly
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, the
dood
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good
 of the
sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 is completely broken that you should
to
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apply
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repair it for our security.
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, the
air
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 conditioner is not worked.
Moreover
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, in summer the
air
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 is hard and uncomfortable.
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, we may feel as if we're not getting enough
air
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.
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, the
last
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 time I feel the absence of oxygen and I train with hardship.
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, I would like that the manager of
this
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sport
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sports
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centre
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center
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 to pay attention to these
problems
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 and supply our security with
new
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a new
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 door and
air
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 conditioner, where we can
breath
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breathe
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clean
air
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. I hope, you will not ignore these
problems
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 at
this
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 time,
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otherwise
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 I should change my training centre. Yours sincerely White

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequent user
  • specific issues
  • cleanliness
  • hygiene
  • broken facilities
  • lack of supplies
  • address the issue
  • response
  • emphasize
  • well-maintained
  • comfort
  • hygiene
  • politely
  • firmly
  • request
  • resolve
  • prompt resolution
  • discuss
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