Some people believe that children should attend extra classes after school while some disagree. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

These days,

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many

people have different perspective about the curriculum of

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of them or themselves

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children. According to some people, children should be

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someone who takes part in an activity

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additional classes after school. There are many

drawbacks but

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drawbacks, but

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have some advantages. I will elaborate both two views and give my opinion. In the

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place, having extra classes after school is the best way to learn more.

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Children

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improve

at their studies and it lead to give children high social status.

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However attending

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However, attending

too

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many

extra classes leads to lack of

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for children.

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They

may do not have enough

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to relax by doing some their hobbies

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as playing instruments or playing sports which can be helpful to reduce the stress and make their mental health strong. To add more of that, they may not experience to communicate or hang out with friends. In the childhood, it is essential to make friends and they can learn relationship skills themselves

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they may lack of communication skill or lack of relationship experience. In the

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place, they may have too much stress because of their the

expections

belief about (or mental picture of) the future

expectations

of their parents who want their

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a young person of either sex

children

always to be top in class. According to some articles which

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is addressing

the healthcare of children, children who are under a lot of pressure are likely to have

high level

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high levels

a high level

of depression and another article about children said that over studying does not mean they

becom

enter or assume a certain state or condition

become

became

becomes

an intelligent or genius

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having too

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many

extra classes may be wasted of

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of children. In conclusion, attending extra classes has some benefits in aspect of

studying but

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studying, but

at the same

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it has

negative impact

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a negative impact

on their

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social or financial or professional status or reputation

standing

and increase the high level of stress and anxiety.