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some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest .Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Education is the backbone of a nation.It has been playing a significant role from the beginning. A camp of society deem that young stars ought to focus on all the subjects of
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school curriculum whereas
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the school curriculum, whereas
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 another segment of some persons believe that teenagers have to concentrate on those subjects in which they are interested.
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I personally believe from my point of view, students should learn all
school
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 subjects because by learning all the subjects they will able to acquire their fundamental knowledge which is essential towards their growth and development. Here, in
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 essay I will interpret some reasons for it.
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 of all
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school
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 subjects are the basic foundation of learning approach for every individual's life. Learning all the subjects of
school
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 curriculum provide a huge amount of knowledge and enhance their academic and interpersonal skills which would open a door to select their future profession. On the other side, it is argued by some people that students should learn only those subjects in which they find
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interesting
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the highest
 proficiency in their field. In my opinion
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 students should read all the academic books to gain the basic cognitive ability
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Without these abilities they will be incapable of solving their problems. To sum up
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 level subjects are the
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 stair which can accessed to our ultimate goal.By learning all the subjects we can find out our strong or weak zones
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 we can exceed our all deterrent that coming to our career.

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