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nowadays,many people have to work longer hours and they feel more stressed out than before.what are the reasons and solutions .

#people #work #hours
Life today is filled with sources of stress
,
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,
working long hours is one of them and cannot be avoided.The objective of
this
 essay is to be
outline
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outlined
 both the causes and appropriate ways
to
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of
 dealing with it. As the unemployment rate is climbing
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people feel more pressure to survive under intense competition and they find it difficult to keep their jobs without working hard. It will become
worse especially
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worse, especially
 for
young
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the young
 who just
gratuated
marked with or divided into degrees
graduated
 from university and they
donot
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do not
 have any real experiences and can be dismissed easily.So people have to put more efforts
on
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in
 their
work
.Another reason is that technological advances make it possible for people to
work
 long hours even while off duty.They have to answer the phones and check emails after they leave
work
,
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,
and
,
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,
for
this
 reason their
work
 hours are prolonged. There are several practices for
emplyers
a person or firm that employs workers
employers
employees
 to help tackle
this
 problem.
one
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One
 is to provide employees with more staff training so they can have a good grasp of technology.If employees can acquire more knowledge and improve their skills
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,
they can
work
 with higher efficiency and reduce their working time.Another approach
is provide
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has provided
provides
 some stress management
trainging
activity leading to skilled behavior
training
 for employees.
This
 can help them achieve
work
 life balance and do more activities for
plessure
a fundamental feeling that is hard to define but that people desire to experience
pleasure
. As suggested above
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technology and competition can be taken as the source of long hours working.Employers have
responsibility
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a responsibility
the responsibility
 to provide staff training and stress management training as it will
benefical
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benefit
beneficial
 for both to gain productivity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • technological developments
  • competition
  • cost of living
  • financial stability
  • digital era
  • disconnect
  • flexible work arrangements
  • work-life balance
  • mental health awareness
  • stress management programs
  • regulations
  • overworking
  • culture
  • productivity
  • automation
  • repetitive tasks
  • alleviate
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