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Nowa days celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? It is a positive or negative development

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In the fast growing world, public figures are earning more wages than the government representatives
besides
 technology gives the numerous platforms to increase the income source.
Therefore
, I would discuss what are the relevant factors and its effect to the society. To commence with, most of the today's generation is highly influenced by these celebrities of different industries like music, sports
such
 as football player, Cristiano Ronaldo has come with a huge fan following all over the world, by
this
 they earn an exorbitant amount of wealth from their matches and tournaments.
Moreover
, the social networking sites
such
 as Instagram or
facebook
Suggestion
Facebook
 help them to boost their popularity among beings, by posting their daily diet schedule or workout pictures, which encourage the today's young generation to follow the healthy lifestyle and especially well-known personalities earn in millions by posting their everyday activities.
However
, political parties do not use
such
 media in their work.
Furthermore
, the famous stars endorse the popular product like Adidas and Chanel, which help to escalate their brand value in marketing and advertisement sectors. What's more, these renewed personalities become ideal for everyone. Their constant participation in charities and donation of huge sum of capital for education cause the positive impact to the young people, to inspire and encourage to follow the same attitude in life.
For instance
, in the
covid
having or marked by a curve or smoothly rounded bend
curved
 19 crisis, there are a number of influential people, who came forward to provide the essential help in the health care department. To recapitulate above arguments, political work is not a job to earn wealth, but to provide services for the public welfare.
Although
, politicians play significant role in the future of society, it seems that the effects of celebrities appear to be overwhelmingly positive for the beings.
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