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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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It is true that many tourists have become more enthusiastic to visit places which they have to tolerate intricate situations, two examples of these locations are the Sahara desert or the antarctic.
Although
 travelling to
such
 places has many merits, it has several demerits which are worth considering. Actually, visiting various places where conditions are complex has many advantages.
Firstly
, it is a great opportunity for them to get acquainted with the history and
also
 the undetected facts which people cannot see typically in cities and countries,
such
 as rare species, pristine nature and so on. In fact, they can experience the beauty of nature in a place
that is
 remote from the noisy cities and hear the sound of the surroundings.
Secondly
, they would like to trial their endurance in order to recognize their weaknesses. What is more, some tourists may be major in special fields and during their journeys, they can acquire a load of information which can be advantageous for later scholarships. One the other hand, these trips have a few disadvantages which should be considered by tourists.
Firstly
, visitors are putting their health at risk due to the fact that these places which I mentioned above paragraph have Savage animals
such
 as bear, Scorpion, snake, and so on and they may assault tourists and lead to irreparable damage to them.
Furthermore
, in intricate conditions tourists may not tolerate lower and upper temperature and
this
 issue can cause health difficulties for them.
Secondly
, some tourists are very stubborn and do dangerous activities in order to show their abilities to others.
In other words
, these activities may blemish to everyone
for instance
, take the photos during driving in the Sahara desert or break the Frosty surface of the oceans in the Antarctic to fishing and deteriorate everything. In conclusion, travelling to bizarre places has many merits outweigh the drawbacks for tourists with tremendous experiences and it would be a good idea for tourists to take all vital equipment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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