The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The graph illustrates the quantities of
fish
and different kinds of meats consumed in a European country in the time period between 1979 and 2004. Over
this
span of 25 years, the
consumption
of beef, lamb and
fish
 has all decreased
while
the
consumption
of chicken has dramatically risen. The biggest
consumption
in 1979 was 
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 (about 220
grams
per
person
was consumed every
week
)
while
the lowest
consumption
in 1979 was that of
fish
 (around 60
grams
  per
person
per
week
). The amount of
fish
which was eaten has remained almost constant at about 50
grams
from 1979 until 2004. The trends of beef and lamb
consumption
were similar, with decreases in
amount
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between the years.
While
beef
consumption
had declined from over 200
grams
per
person
per
week
to around 100
grams
during 25 years, lamb
consumption
fell from 150
grams
to approximately 50
grams
 in the same period.
In contrast
, chicken
consumption
had risen gradually and reached a peak at
250grams
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250 grams
per
person
 per 
week
 
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 between 1994 and 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, consumption, grams, person, week with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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